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你的雅思作文句子有效吗?

2015-5-30 18:11| 发布者: ayawei| 查看: 125| 评论: 0

摘要: 你的雅思作文句子有效吗?  句子结构是雅思写作评分标准“语法的多样性与准确度”中一项十分重要的考量因素,但这并不意味着要求考生具备写长难句的能力。在追求输出像雅思阅读一样精到的语言之前,我们首先要确保 ...
你的雅思作文句子有效吗?

  句子结构是雅思写作评分标准“语法的多样性与准确度”中一项十分重要的考量因素,但这并不意味着要求考生具备写长难句的能力。在追求输出像雅思阅读一样精到的语言之前,我们首先要确保的应当是写出来的句子是正确的。有效的句子甚而段落通常应当同时满足以下五个要素:一致、连贯、简洁、强调、多样。

  1. 一致:如句内的逻辑关系,注意检查是否存在简单推论、逻辑残缺、逻辑悖论、依赖偏见等。

  Born in a small town in South Chinain the early 1950s, he grew up to be a famous musician.

  → He was born in a small town in South China in the early 1950s. In his childhood he liked to sing songs. Later he entered a conservatory. In the 1970s he became a famous musician.

  2. 连贯:这个问题在平行结构、共用主语、使用指代的情况下尤其需要注意。

  We thought she was charming, intelligent, and a very capable young woman.

  → We thought she was charming, intelligent, and very capable.

  Or: We thought she was a charming, intelligent, and very capable young woman.

  He was knocked down by a bicycle, but it was not serious.

  → He was knocked down by a bicycle, but was not badly injured.

  Looking out of the window, the grassland stretches as far as the eye can reach.

  → Looking out of the window, we can see the grassland stretching as far as the eye can reach.

  Or: Outside the window, the grassland stretches as far as the eye can reach.

  He gave a reason for not attending the meeting, which nobody believed.

  → He gave a reason, which nobody believed, for not attending the meeting.

  Or: He gave a reason for not attending the meeting, a reason which nobody believed.

  3. 简洁:英美文化推崇坦率和直接,通常不需要体现咱儒家文化的含蓄和委婉。

  It was small in size and blue in colour.

  → It was small and blue.

  He usually likes to drink all kinds of wines that are produced in France.

  → He prefers French wines.

  4. 强调:正如每篇文章都要有中心思想(main idea),每个段落都要有主题句(topic sentence)一般,每个句子都要围绕一个中心观点清晰地呈现出作者想要表现的重点。

  He is modest and hardworking and is a good student.

  → He is a good student, modest and hardworking.

  There is a big tree, which is said to be 300 years old, in the temple.

  → In the temple there is a big tree, which is said to be 300 years old.

  At the sight of the disorderly crowd, he was aware that something bad would be possible.

  → The moment he saw the disorderly crowd, he knew that something bad wouldhappen.

  5. 多样:中文重重复,英文重替代,中英差异使然。

你的雅思作文句子有效吗?的延伸阅读——雅思写作高分技巧秘籍。

  雅思写作高分技巧一: 避免空洞的单词和词组

  1. 一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息,完全可以被删掉。比如下面的句子:

  When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.

  这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为:

  Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.

  2. 有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换,例如:

  Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help

  their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at

  this point in time.

  “due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子,可以替换,简化为下面的表达方式:

  Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now.

  雅思写作高分技巧二: 避免重复

  1. 尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复,但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。例如下面这个例子:

  The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.

  large 对一个farm来说就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改为:

  The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.

  更简洁的表达方式为:

  My grandfather grew up on a large farm.

  2. 有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换,例如:

  My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。

  这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly,显得更为简洁:

  My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm.

  雅思写作高分技巧三:选择最恰当的语法结构

  选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则:

  1. 一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。例如:.

  The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study

  engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.

  从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:

  My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm.

  2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构,例如下面的句子:

  There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather.

  可以改为:

  My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.

  更简洁的句式为:

  My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.

  3.把从句改为短语或单词。例如:

  Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers

  from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.

  简介的表达方式为:

  The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university.

  4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。例如:

  In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family.

  本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”,而使用了被动语态后,仿佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

  In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.

  以上就是小编总结的雅思写作高分技巧,提醒想要在雅思写作方面获得高分考生,一定要对这雅思写作高分三项方法熟记于胸,写作的时候也不要违背雅思写作高分的三项方法。


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