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雅思写作理论解释的应用

2015-8-12 15:47| 发布者: ayawei| 查看: 301| 评论: 0

摘要: 雅思写作理论解释的应用  雅思考试大作文的评分标准Task Response里提出了三点要求:1. addresses all parts of the task; 2. presents a position; 3. presents, extends and supports main ideas.对这三项完成情 ...
雅思写作理论解释的应用

  雅思考试大作文的评分标准Task Response里提出了三点要求:1. addresses all parts of the task; 2. presents a position; 3. presents, extends and supports main ideas.对这三项完成情况的不同决定了不同的分数。

  在考生写作时,完成题目所有要求和有明确的立场(即文章要以题干所提供的话题或观点为依据,覆盖双方观点或就利弊展开讨论,提出自己倾向的观点)并不难,但是如何展开自己的main ideas,并且符合relevant, fully extended and well supported这三个要求时,很多学生就感觉无从下笔了。

  展开观点的方法叫做论证方法,常见的有四种:举例,因果,对比和解释。在这篇文章中我们重点讨论最后一种:解释。

  将一个观点进行解释有三个方法:

  1. if…will/would

  2. without …will/would

  3. in other words

  一: 正面论证 if…will/would

  Advocates of this believe that today’s sedentary lifestyle and stressful working conditions mean that physical activity is no longer part of either our work or our leisure time. If there were easy-to-reach local sports centres, we would be more likely to make exercise a regular part of our lives, rather than just collapsing in front of a screen every evening. (C9 T3)

  考官范文中给出的观点是:如今终日伏案的生活方式和紧张的工作环境使体育活动从我们的工作和休闲生活中消失。由于本段是写Advocates的观点,即增加体育设施对提高公众健康有好处,所以观点之后紧跟着有进一步的解释:如果当地有近便的体育活动中心,那么我们就很有可能将体育运动作为生活的一部分,而不是每晚都瘫坐在屏幕前。

  正面论证更像是对观点所产生结果的进一步列举,比如谈到出国的好处:出国可以提高语言水平,如果一个人出国,他会与native speaker直接接触,从而有了更多面对面练习语言的机会。

  二:反面论证 without … will/would

  Good musicians or artists and exceptional sports stars have probably succeeded because of both good training and natural talent. Without the natural talent, continuous training would be neither attractive nor productive, and without the training, the child would not learn how to exploit and develop their talent. (C7 T1)

  范文中观点是:杰出的音乐家,艺术家和体育名星的成功是训练和天赋的结合。作者用了两个without从反面进行解释论证:没有天赋,连续训练可能既乏味又没有效果;没有训练,孩子们就不知道如何开发利用他们的才能。

  反面论证是从“如果没有…”这个角度去扩充思路。比如说到政府与环境的话题:政府应该加大对污染企业的监管,如果没有政府的监督和管理,那些污染企业就可以在排放污染的同时获利,并且逃脱惩罚,这样对社会和环境治理都是极其不利的。

  三:解释 in other words

  解释并不是把一句话换几个同义词再写一遍,这个看似简单的短语前后有着很大的奥妙,看看考官是如何利用这个方法的。

  Overall, I think an ability to keep clear perspectives in life is a more essential factor in achieving happiness. By that I mean an ability to have a clear sense of what is important in our lives (the welfare of our families, the quality of our relationships, making other people happy, etc.) and what is not ( a problem at work, getting annoyed about trivial things, etc.). (C4 T2)

  作者认为要获得幸福的一个更重要的因素是:to keep clear perspectives in life。这是一个很抽象的概念,如何做到这一点呢?范文中用了by that I mean来做进一步解释:也就是要知道生命中什么是重要的什么是不重要的。这是一个从抽象到具体的解释。

雅思写作理论解释的应用的延伸阅读——雅思写作高分技巧秘籍。

  雅思写作高分技巧一: 避免空洞的单词和词组

  1. 一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息,完全可以被删掉。比如下面的句子:

  When all things are considered, young adults of today live more satisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion.

  这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为:

  Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.

  2. 有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进行替换,例如:

  Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help

  their parents, they did not have the options that young people have at

  this point in time.

  “due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子,可以替换,简化为下面的表达方式:

  Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did not have the options that young people have now.

  雅思写作高分技巧二: 避免重复

  1. 尽量避免重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重复,但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。例如下面这个例子:

  The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.

  large 对一个farm来说就是size方面的large,所以in size可以去掉,改为:

  The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.

  更简洁的表达方式为:

  My grandfather grew up on a large farm.

  2. 有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换,例如:

  My grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on his parents' farm。

  这里的over and over again就可以改为repeatedly,显得更为简洁:

  My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents' farm.

  雅思写作高分技巧三:选择最恰当的语法结构

  选择合适的语法结构可以使句子意思的表达更为精确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要,但选择最恰当的语法结构仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下原则是在考虑选择何种语法结构时可以参考的原则:

  1. 一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该能够反映句子中的最重要的意思。例如:.

  The situation that resulted in my grandfather's not being able to study

  engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.

  从意思上来分析,上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfather's not being able to study”,而在表达这个概念时,原句用的主语是situation,谓语动词是was,不能强调需要表达的重点概念,可以改为下面这句话:

  My grandfather couldn't study engineering because his father needed help on the farm.

  2.避免频繁使用“there be”结构,例如下面的句子:

  There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather.

  可以改为:

  My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.

  更简洁的句式为:

  My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily.

  3.把从句改为短语或单词。例如:

  Dairy cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers

  from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.

  简介的表达方式为:

  The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearest university.

  4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候,才使用被动语态。例如:

  In the fall, not only did the cows have to be milked, but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfather's family.

  本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfather's family”,而使用了被动语态后,仿佛重心变成了cows和hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态,相对来说更简洁一些:

  In the fall, my grandfather's family not only milked the cow but also mowed and stacked the hay.

  以上就是小编总结的雅思写作高分技巧,提醒想要在雅思写作方面获得高分考生,一定要对这雅思写作高分三项方法熟记于胸,写作的时候也不要违背雅思写作高分的三项方法。


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