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雅思写作开头需的合适长度

2015-5-11 16:07| 发布者: ayawei| 查看: 102| 评论: 0

摘要: 雅思写作开头需的合适长度  在雅思写作教学过程中,经常碰到学员在写作大作文的开头的时候废话连篇,长度爆长,句子恶心,基本都属于见光死开头,也就是说文章开头如果这么写的话,基本就被划到5分或以下的档次了 ...
雅思写作开头需的合适长度

  在雅思写作教学过程中,经常碰到学员在写作大作文的开头的时候废话连篇,长度爆长,句子恶心,基本都属于见光死开头,也就是说文章开头如果这么写的话,基本就被划到5分或以下的档次了。比如:

  雅思写作开头之见光死:

  With the development of society and economy, more and more children spend more and more time on computer playing more and more. Some people who are strongly against it think that it has negative effects on them both physically and mentally. In my opinion, I think that children should not play computer, they need choose other games.

  名师讲解雅思写作开头:

  这就是传说中的见光死开头!首段又臭又长,不是说不能写长,而是空有长度,没有内容,考官看完会直接傻掉。很多同学喜欢写with the development of society and economy 这样的开头,其实写过作文的人就知道,这是典型的中式思维模式在作怪。英国人的思维方式和我们不同,他们重视细节,讲究单刀直入,所以开头的废话连篇会直接让考官感到反感,恶心,进而影响整篇文章的分数。还有那个经典的more and more,重复太多明显缺乏词汇量。

  开头不能这么写。而是如下:

  雅思写作开头范例:

  I tend to agree that young children can be negatively affected by too much time spent on the computer every day. This is partly because sitting in front of a screen for too long can be damaging to both the eyes and the physical posture of a young child, regardless of what they are using the computer for.

  名师讲解雅思写作开头:

  这个开头就非常符合英国人的口味,不但开头没有任何废话和空洞的内容,相反,句子充满务实,具体的风格,而且,开头的最后一句话是对中间段落的一点提示,有过渡的作用。

雅思写作开头需的合适长度的延伸阅读——IELTS考试写作技巧之有效的句子要有重点,并且要突出重点。

  同学们已经对IELTS考试的写作有了比较客观的认识,下面两全其美网校城编辑简单总结IELTS考试写作技巧:

  1. 把重点摆在句首或句尾。

  一般而论,最显眼的位置是在“句尾,其次是在句首,中间的位置最平淡,乏善可陈。例如:

  (1) Incorrect grammar and improper construction invariably distract readers'attention.

  (2) The history of vocabulary is, in many ways, the record of civilisation.

  把重点放在句尾是种“吊胃口”的方法,读者或听者非得读完或听完整句不可。

  2. 在复杂句里,把主句放在从句之后。

  除了名词从句和形容词从句之外,因为它们位置较固定,副词从句中有几种的位置灵活,可以在主句之前出现,

  也可以跟在主句之后。通常我们就把这样的副词从句提前,重点则放在后头的主句,如(3b):

  (3a) I came upon an old classmate when I went to town yesterday.

  (3b) When I went to town yesterday, I came upon an old classmate.

  副词短语更是如此,如 (4b):

  (4a) Steel is commonly used to make knives, razors and other useful tools because of its durability.

  (4b) Beacuse of its durability, steel is commonly used to make knives,razers and other useful tools.

  3. 把较重要或有分量的词语放在后头,如(5b)和(6b):

  (5a) I was delighted and amused by the classical opera

  (5b) I was amused and delighted by the classical opera.

  (6a) That singer's life was tragic and brief.

  (6b) That singer's life was brief and tragic.

  4. 把句子中一系列的项目作逻辑性的排列。例如:

  (7) Tony ate his dinner, watched TV, and then went to bed.

  (8) Were you bored with years of study in elementary school, high school and institute of higher education?

  5. 必要时,重复重要的语词或概念。

  例如:

  (9) Jackie enjoys the company of ladies. He likes their beauty, he likes their delicacy, he likes their vivacity,

  and he likes their silence.

  (10) ...the land stretched out without names. Nameless headlands split the surf; nameless lakes reflected the

  nameless mountains and nameless rivers flowed through nameless valleys and nameless bays.

  6. 尽量用主动说态,因此(11b)比(11a)好:

  (11a) A pedestrian was struck on the head by a flying stone.

  (11b) A flying stone struck a pedestrian on the head.

  7. 适当时候,可用倒装句和平行句,如:

  (12) Seven dwarfs lived here in the centre of the dark forest. → Here, in the centre of the dark forest

  lived seven dwarfs.

  (13) Severity breeds fear; roughness breeds hatred.

  (14) Honesty recommends that I speak; self-interest demands that I remain silent.

  最后,两全其美网校城编辑祝大家能够顺利地通过IELTS考试!


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