雅思写作批改

　　雅思写作批改

　　许多学生非常的重视各种“黄金模板”，可是许多同学背了很多的模板，最终的写作分数却仍然不理想。在下面的两篇文章中就用实例为大家讲解雅思考官是如何批改雅思作文的，同学们快来看看这些作文中的小错误背后都隐藏了什么玄机吧。

　　雅思作文这样批，系列一

　　请看下面这个小作文的开头段，看似行文流水，实则欲哭无泪。

　　As can be seen from the table chart, it gives us the percentage of national consumer experience by category in 2002 in five different countries.谈及套句，小作文中“As can be seen from…”曾被列为小作文必备佳句，而孰不知此句虽好，但native speaker 常把它放在主体段落开头句。若论行文习惯，实在勉强。再者，“table chart”必会让考官在批卷的疲劳中会心一笑。但是烤鸭们，不知啊，你让他笑，他却让你人比黄花瘦，尽管他是那样的爱你。此短语翻译成中文叫“表格图”，考生自是觉得挺有中国风的感觉。但考官会认为是“这table就是表格，也就是图的一种，还后面要是再加一chart，再来一图。实为black sheep 一族”啊!南部陈更要翻译成“表格图图”?实在是具有喜感啊!再论“us”一词，感觉倒是亲民派系， 考官考生一家人啊。但是，雅思写作，半学术文体，这词总有点较为随意。

　　所以，宁为被动，隐去施动者，换成it can be seen ,或是it represents that 等句，或许会更好点。考生最无辜的地方就是下面的这个percentage。我们都知道，衣服表格不可能只有全图一个数据，又怎会遗忘名词单复数的问题呢?最后那个“in 2002 in five different countries”，感觉起来好似是信息满满，不知道是否也是信心满满?语法老师告诉我们：当句子中同时有地点状语和时间状语时,一般要把地点状语放在时间状语之前 。要知道，不走寻常路，那是考官的作风。考生要是也这样做，哭泣大于微笑。

　　基于上述段落的分析，不知道同学们是否也会有所收获?其实开头段，自是不必非得写的那叫一个倾国倾城。简单大方，信息全面，能够统领全文，那就最好。你，懂得了吗?

　　雅思作文这样批，系列二

　　People have, in rercent years, shown concern on the dire consequences of global warming and air pollution. Some people suggest that we should limit are travel(travelling) instead of car use. It seems to me that the objection against air travel is based on incorrect facts and stereotypes.(The)Vehicle is an integral segment of urban industrial civilization, mirroring contemporary life, in its best and unrest aspects.

　　Just as machinery is integral to industrialization, air is central to world economy.(有逻辑关系吗?)Air travels make it possible for people to move around the world freely and quickly. Today, the tips can be completed in a matter of hours. One can attend a meeting in Pairs and dinner in New York the same day. There is a growing recognition that air travels have several advantages, while(连接词使用有误，改成meanwhile)it can(补上主语) ensures(删掉s) the growth of modern business such as international tourism, transportation and express delivery ,etc. Therefore, limiting air travel itself is a grave mistake ,that (非限定从句引导词改成which)would be a severe blow to these industries and may even damage world economy.

　　以上即是为大家搜索整理的有关雅思写作考官如何批改的全部内容，大家在备考雅思写作中可以对以上所提到的小错误适当避免，以便取得更为理想的雅思写作成绩.

雅思写作批改的延伸阅读——IELTS考试写作技巧之有效的句子要有重点，并且要突出重点

　　同学们已经对IELTS考试的写作有了比较客观的认识，下面两全其美网校城编辑简单总结IELTS考试写作技巧：

　　1. 把重点摆在句首或句尾。

　　一般而论，最显眼的位置是在“句尾，其次是在句首，中间的位置最平淡，乏善可陈。例如：

　　(1) Incorrect grammar and improper construction invariably distract readers'attention.

　　(2) The history of vocabulary is, in many ways, the record of civilisation.

　　把重点放在句尾是种“吊胃口”的方法，读者或听者非得读完或听完整句不可。

　　2. 在复杂句里，把主句放在从句之后。

　　除了名词从句和形容词从句之外，因为它们位置较固定，副词从句中有几种的位置灵活，可以在主句之前出现，

　　也可以跟在主句之后。通常我们就把这样的副词从句提前，重点则放在后头的主句，如(3b)：

　　(3a) I came upon an old classmate when I went to town yesterday.

　　(3b) When I went to town yesterday, I came upon an old classmate.

　　副词短语更是如此，如 (4b):

　　(4a) Steel is commonly used to make knives, razors and other useful tools because of its durability.

　　(4b) Beacuse of its durability, steel is commonly used to make knives,razers and other useful tools.

　　3. 把较重要或有分量的词语放在后头，如(5b)和(6b)：

　　(5a) I was delighted and amused by the classical opera

　　(5b) I was amused and delighted by the classical opera.

　　(6a) That singer's life was tragic and brief.

　　(6b) That singer's life was brief and tragic.

　　4. 把句子中一系列的项目作逻辑性的排列。例如：

　　(7) Tony ate his dinner, watched TV, and then went to bed.

　　(8) Were you bored with years of study in elementary school, high school and institute of higher education?

　　5. 必要时，重复重要的语词或概念。

　　例如：

　　(9) Jackie enjoys the company of ladies. He likes their beauty, he likes their delicacy, he likes their vivacity,

　　and he likes their silence.

　　(10) ...the land stretched out without names. Nameless headlands split the surf; nameless lakes reflected the

　　nameless mountains and nameless rivers flowed through nameless valleys and nameless bays.

　　6. 尽量用主动说态，因此(11b)比(11a)好：

　　(11a) A pedestrian was struck on the head by a flying stone.

　　(11b) A flying stone struck a pedestrian on the head.

　　7. 适当时候，可用倒装句和平行句，如：

　　(12) Seven dwarfs lived here in the centre of the dark forest. → Here, in the centre of the dark forest

　　lived seven dwarfs.

　　(13) Severity breeds fear; roughness breeds hatred.

　　(14) Honesty recommends that I speak; self-interest demands that I remain silent.

　　最后，两全其美网校城编辑祝大家能够顺利地通过IELTS考试!