雅思名师：好作文是改出来的

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摘要: 雅思名师：好作文是改出来的　　好的作文不是一次性写出来的，而是改出来的，好的口语也不是一次性说出来的，而是无数次修改遣词造句的结果，在我读哈佛法学院那本书的时候，发现即使最牛的金牌律师，在临上庭的 ...

雅思名师：好作文是改出来的

　　好的作文不是一次性写出来的，而是改出来的，好的口语也不是一次性说出来的，而是无数次修改遣词造句的结果，在我读哈佛法学院那本书的时候，发现即使最牛的金牌律师，在临上庭的时候都会把盘问的每一个字写在纸上，以求万无一失，作为第二语言学习者的我们，在英文学习的时候，没有任何理由不这么去做。雅思班的同学发来一些句子，让我帮他们修改，而我给他们的建议都是自己先修改三次，有明显进步后，有解决不了的问题我再来帮助他们。以下是几个我觉得比较典型的句子，我们来分析一下。

　　原句：With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing from the first moment

　　when opening my eyes to the last second when clasing them, and is planted in my heart

　　deeptly just like a luxuriant tree.

　　点评：With all the reasons, the mind to be with you is always existing(时态有一点问题) from 要加上the first moment when opening(主语是mind不是I,所以这里不能用ing，否则就是mind自己张开眼睛的意思) my eyes to the last second when clasing(单词拼写错误) them, and is planted (是不是想说植根)in my heart deeply, just like a luxuriant tree.

　　修改参考：With all the reasons that can be found in this universe, the faith to be with has been

　　deeply rooted in my mind, heart and soul from the first moment when I open my eyes to

　　the last second when I close them.

　　原句：I will spend my entire life protecting you and to make you be away from the hurt,

　　undoubtedly, ensureyou live in the world filled with sunshine and happiness.

　　修改点评：I will spent my entire life protecting you and to make(这里不能用不定式) you be away from the hurt, undoubtedly(放在动词前面或者句子前面), ansure(单词拼写错误)you live in the world filled with sunshine and happiness.

　　I will spend (加上副词) my entire life protecting you from any hurt(什么样的伤害) and ensure you a world with sunshine and happiness.(后面可以加很多细节)

　　修改参考 It may take you years to wait for me but I spend my entire life searching for you, only

　　hoping to keep you safe from harms in pouring rain and bring in an endless sunshine

　　where all flowers blooms at your smile, all birds sing at your call, all stars twinkle at your

　　dance, and all the universe turns to heaven at your love.

　　原句：When the earthquake occurs, the world gives a warm hand.

　　点评修改：When the earthquake occurs on May 12th, causing nearly 30 thousand people of death

　　and making most cities in ruins, the whole world offers a warm hand, extremely

　　donation(是不是想说generous???) ,kind-hearted assist (是不是想说assistance???) and the strength which we cohere for Sichuan.

　　修改参考：The earthquake on May 12th can shake the foundation of Sichuan’s tallest buildings, leaving 70000 lives killed and several cities destroyed, but it cannot

　　touch the foundation of the whole world where a warm hand is always there, the entire

　　planet where we are always connected as one, and the global village where all is for one

　　and one is for all.

雅思名师：好作文是改出来的的延伸阅读——IELTS考试复习计划建议

　　同学们已经对IELTS考试的题型分外熟悉了，之后又应该如何有效地进行复习呢?如果在现在的考试中所谓的技巧用到的越来越少，那么解题思路就显得尤为重要了。就学术类阅读部分，两全其美网校城编辑简单提出几点建议：

　　1. 打印老师的阅读课课件，结合自己课堂笔记把课件在回忆，理解的基础上补充的更加完整，熟读并且努力背诵解题思路。

　　2. 结合已经做过的真题，分析出自己擅长和不擅长的题型，做到心中有数，以应对考场各种情况。

　　有了以上的准备工作，我们可以按照有限的复习时间这样来安排：

　　★ 考试时间：1-2周的同学

　　目标原则：查漏补缺

　　按照题型模块，比如这几天准备攻克"选段意"的题目，那么：

　　1. 先把笔记上这部分的做题思路背下来。