考前30天狂背作文 第三章 范文点评(50)
Direction 23 Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should: 1. describe the picture; 2. interpret the meaning of the picture; 3. make your comments. You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. 审题： 这道题的出题方式我们已遇到多次了，是"描述图画+阐释含义+作出评论"的模式，这种模式在写作中的灵活程度比较大。 Sample: In the picture, a young man asks an old man, "What can be got without pains in this world?" The old man replies, "There is only one thing: poverty." Looking at the drawing, I think a lot. It tells us that we have to make strenuous efforts whenever we want to be successful in a particular field. How can a person achieve his ultimate goal without longtime practices and continuous attempts? A good case in point is mountaineering. Nobody is born a good mountain climber, and one can only become a skilled one after countless injuries. The scenery at the mountaintop is fantastic, but the road to the summit is always rough and full of hardships and dangers. Isn't scientific research the same? Countless sleepless nights, thousands of failures and even more-all of these are part of a scientist's life. Only a few of them can make great scientific breakthroughs, and all of these people are the most persevering. On the contrary, if a person is determined to live an idle life, and wait for God to put something in his hands, then that thing should and could only be poverty. If a person has neither ideal nor the determination to live better and let others live better, his existence is not meaningful at all. 点评： 这篇文章共分四段：首段是描述图画;次段是总结寓意;第三段是举例说明;第四段是下结论。该文最引人注目之处是第三个段落，整段举了两个例子。我们在多年的考研阅卷中发现，大多数同学的举例是不成功的。举例子要具备两个条件才能成功，一是典型--既要紧扣主题，又要具有代表性，能够震撼人心，切忌不痛不痒;二是精练--用简洁的话语表达深刻的意义，切忌拖泥带水。本文第三段在这点上很值得学习。 文章第一段非常简洁。第二段的首句是过渡性的句子，次句直接对图画的意义做出总结--无论我们想在哪个领域获得成功，都必须付出艰辛的努力。接着采用了语气非常强烈的反问句--没有长时间的实践和不断的努力，一个人又怎能实现最终的目标?第三段包括了两个例子，一个是登山，一个是科学研究。第四段是结尾段落，首先与第三段是相对的，其次又呼应了文章的首段，非常精妙。该段共有两句话，第一句话说如果一个人下定决心要过闲散的生活，等着上天在他手中放上某样东西，那么这样东西就只能是贫穷。第二句话进一步说，如果一个人既没有理想也没有决心让自己和别人过得更好，那么他的存在就失去了意义。第二句话与第一句采用了同样的句式，语气却更加强烈，给人留下了很深刻的印象。该段第一句话中的should and could be...是一个高级用法，意思是"将会是而且只能是"。 心得： 我们重点来看一下举例的段落，即第三段。该段共有六句话。第一句话引出了登山。第二句话是一个经典句子，没有人生来就是一个好的登山者，一个人只有在无数伤痛后才能成长起来--该句的内在逻辑联系非常强。第三句话说山顶的风光绮丽，但通往顶点的路却充满艰辛(句中有平行名词的用法)。第四句话采用反问句巧妙过渡到科学研究上来。第五句先用平行的名词词组，而后在破折号后写道"所有这些都是科学家生活的一部分"相当独特。注意句中part一定不要加冠词。最后一句写道，他们中只有一小部分人能取得重大的科学突破，而这些人又都是最坚忍之人。 请大家仔细学习这一段落。一是该段的构建方法，看句子与句子是怎样有机结合，层层推进，构成一个理想的段落的。二是学习本段的举例方法。例子是用来说明道理的，如果能说到点子上，说得透彻，就一定能服人。
考前30天狂背作文 第三章 范文点评(50)的延伸阅读— —2014考研英语作文必背十大模板
考研英语作文，你是选择背模板还是提升英语写作自己写?两方面见解相持不下，不过对于英语复习时间不够充足和备考时间不够的同学，模板想必是少不了的。 1. 图画作文 It seems to me that the cartoonist is sending a message about _______(图画主题)， which is ______________(进一步的说明)。 He seems to be saying that_______________(给出细节)。 In my opinion， ___________(个人阐述)。 This simple picture is a wake up call for ______(所涉群体，如the whole of the human race)。 Therefore， it is imperative for us to take drastic measures to put an end to _____________(问题所在)。 One the one hand， we must _________________(建议一)。 It is clear that the drawer of the illustration is urging us to _________(进一步说明)。 On the other hand， ________________(建议二) Only in this way can we___________(展望前景)。 2. 图表作文 The chart gives us an overall picture of the ____________(图表主题)。 The first thing we notice is that_______________(图表最大特点)。 This means that as __________， _________________(进一步说明)。 We can see from the statistics given that _______________(图表细节一)。 After ving_________(细节一中的第一个变化)， the _____Ved+幅度+时间(紧跟着的变化)。 The figures also tells us that_________________________(图表细节二)。 (数据位置，如In the second column)， we can see that ____________accounts for _______(进一步描述)。Judging from these figures， we can draw the conclusion that___________(结论)。 The reason for this， as far as I am concerned is that_____________(给出原因)。 / It is high time that we Ved(发出倡议) 3. 利弊型作文 Recently the issue of whether or not______(讨论话题) has been in the limelight and has aroused wide concern in the public. There are two major arguments that can be made for_________. For one thing， __________can bring ____ to_____________(优点一)。 For another， it is widely hold that people usually ____when ________________________________(优点二)。 But we must not lose sight of the fact that there are also drawbacks to__________， among which are ____________(列举缺点)。 For instance， it can be __________to _____________(举例说明)。 In addition， many people find it ________(形容词)to _______________(第二个缺点) When asked to __________， I tend to ____________. This is because I _______________(原因一)。 Furthermore， _______________________(原因二)。 Finally， ______________(原因三)。 4. 展望未来型 The effects ___________ has produced on____________ can be boiled down to two major ones.First ， __________________(影响一)。 More importantly， ________________(影响二)。 Hence， I believe that we will see a ____________(提出展望)/ Nevertheless， I do not think we will see a ______(或反面展望) There are numerous reasons why ____， and I would like to explore a few of the most important ones here. The first is that the more(比较级)_____， the more (比较级)。 In addition， we all aGREe that________________________(第二个原因) 5. 告示 You should write about 100 words. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use Department of Chinese Language and Literature at the end of the announcement. Chinese-Speaking Contest January 19， 2008 To improve students„ ability to speak Chinese and enrich after-class activities， the Students‟ Union of Department of Chinese Language and Literature is organizing a school-wide Chinese-speaking contest to be held on Saturday next week (26 January) at the Students„ Auditorium. Those who are interested in taking part in it may sign up with the monitor of their classes before Tuesday next week. Five professors will be invited to be judges. The first six winners will be given awards. Everybody is welcome to be present at the contest. the Students„ Union Department of Chinese Language and Literature 6. 职业道德 the cartoons vividly depict people in expanding numbers are engaged in open and rampant cheating in business. In the first drawing， a boy has no courage to have dinner in front of delicious foods in that there may exist pesticide pollution or poisonous elements in the foods. In the second picture， the administrative office， salesmen， breeding families and forage shops are laughing at the hanging of a poisonous duck. Professional dishonesty has a very damaging effect. In the first place， since cheating in business reveals the moral deficiencies as well as the humanity weakness of those businessmen who engage in it， the dishonest practice will ultimately exerts a perverse influence on the whole society. In the second place， it not only puts honest businessmen at a competitive disadvantage， encouraging those who did not cheat to adopt similar practices later， but undermines the very foundation of professional ethics in business. It is often painful to impose sanctions in a specific case. But it is worthwhile. For one thing， to eliminate professional dishonesty thoroughly， serious forms of punishment for a willful offense—a suspension of the offender from business—should be applied. For another， since the incentives to engage in cheating in business are mainly due to a lack of adequate precautions， drastic actions should be taken to prevent one form of cheating or another. 7. 投诉信 Directions： You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because your roommate always has friends visiting and has parties in the room. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons. Dear Sir or Madam， I am writing to express/air dissatisfaction/disappointment/concern regarding accommodation. I would prefer to move into a single room next semester， as I find the present sharing arrangement inconvenient. I must explain that the reason for my dissatisfaction is my roommate„s inconsiderate behavior. For one thing， his friends are constantly visiting him; for another， he regularly holds noisy parties. To solve this problem/surmount this difficulty/improve this situation/crack this hard nut， I hope to draw the attention of the authorities concerned. I am sure you will aGREe that the only solution for me is to move into a room of my own. Therefore， I would be grateful if you could find a single room for me， preferably not in the same building but as near to the college campus as possible. Yours sincerely， Li Ming 8. 网络问题 In recent years， people are developing an inseparable relationship with Internet. As is vividly depicted in the picture， it is convenient for us to click the mouse when surfing on line， either to entertain ourselves or to meet the work„s needs. Actually on-line visiting has become a routine activity in our everyday life. However， it seems rath er ironic to use a chain instead of normal wire to connect with the mouse in this picture. The exaggerative and impressive portrayal has subtly revealed the duality of the relationship between man and Internet. Discussion on the duality has become very popular in newspapers or in people„s chats. On the one hand， no one denies that Internet is currently one of the most useful media in our daily life. People from all walks of life are benefiting considerably from its powerful function of information communication. But on the other hand， a GREat many people admit that they are too much addicted to Internet to maintain a regular and wholesome lifestyle. Cyber-living resembles the experience of looking constantly into a kaleidoscope which displays both colored patterns and illusions. Such a waste of time inevitably leads to their failure in their life and work. Accordingly， it is necessary for us to use Internet in a reasonable way and restrain from overindulgence. For one thing， college students in expanding numbers get on line every day to learn the news， to study English by registering for web courses， to exchange information through e-mails with their net friends and to download their favorite music， FLASH， film and pictures. Being veteran on-line shoppers， they frequently purchase books， CDs at much lower prices. For another， once indulged in the fictitious world， people can barely concentrate on real life. Consequently， many students just chat on line or play computer games immoderately everyday， skipping many essential classes. After all， Internet is invented to enrich our life， to connect you and me， and to improve the efficiency of our work rather than shackle us with a chain. 9. 环境问题 the pictures symbolically illustrate pollution is becoming increasingly serious around the globe. In the first cartoon， a man is scorching the earth on a chimney. In the second one， a famous ancient Chinese poet， Wang Bo is astonished by the heavy smoke poured by chimneys into the air and dirty river polluted by a factory. We are informed that “the autumn river is the same color with the sky”。 the drawer is sending a message about the significance of the need for everyone to fight against the danger of environmental pollution. There is no denying that the industry is indications of civilization， proGREss and development. Unfortunately， as industry develops， so will the number of factories， and the amount of industry pollutants. We are so development-oriented that we almost can sacrifice our blue sky and pure water in order to obtain a little material gain. As a consequence， it is imperative for us to take drastic actions. On the one hand， the factories should be equipped with devices which can dispose of waste gas and water so as to prevent them from polluting our planet. On the other hand， there should be an increasingly loud voice from the public for firm actions against poisonous gas sent off and unhealthy water polluted by factories. 10. 提纲式议论文 Directions： A. Title： Air Travel B. Time limit： 40 minutes C. Word limit： about 200 words D. Your essay should be written clearly on ANSWER SHEET 2. E. Your essay should be based on the information given below. 现在许多人愿意乘飞机旅行。随着我国民航事业的迅速发展，全国各大城市兴建了许多现代化的机场。乘飞机旅行有许多长处(方便、快捷、省时、舒适等);但是，空中旅行也有许多不足之处(机票价格贵，有的旅客不适应空中旅行，常常感到身体不适，甚至有人还担心发生空难)。请你简单阐述上述两个方面。最后请你说明你的看法。 ( Composition for reference only ) Many people prefer to travel by air. This is because air travel has some advantages. In the first place， airplane， the miracle created by man， is the fastest means of transport. It takes the least time for one to travel by air from one place to another. Secondly， traveling by air is convenient and comfortable. Friendly air hostesses are affectionate and considerate. They look after passengers all the way to their destinations. Moreover， on long distance flights there are films and music for people to entertain themselves. As a popular saying goes， “Everything has two sides .” The same is true of air travel. It has some disadvantages， too. For one thing， air travel costs a GREat deal. The average Chinese are not rich enough to afford expensive air fares. So they prefer to take trains， which save a lot of money. For another， although passengers are assured of their safety， they are still worried about it during the journey because flying always involves more or less risk. As far I am concerned ， the advantage mentioned above exceed the disadvantages. If I were given choice between traveling by train， I would certainly prefer the former. For me， time is money and it is the most important thing I have to take into consideration whatever I do. (216 words) |
