考前30天狂背作文 第三章 范文点评(42)
Directions15 Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should: 1. describe the picture; 2. give your comment; 3. suggest possible solutions. You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. 审题： 这篇文章的结构与我们前面所学的稍有不同，主要是第二个段落，这个段落不是要求写原因，而是要给出自己的评论。对于本文来说，就是对算命这一事件给出自己的看法。 Sample: In the above picture, a student goes to a fortune teller to ask whether she will succeed or not in the coming College Entrance Examination. It is obvious that the drawer wishes all of us to ponder over this social phenomenon, which is becoming more and more common nowadays. I myself see no point in going to a fortune teller. First, life is always full of accidents and coincidences, and how can the fortune teller know a person's life route exactly? Second, if we knew our fortune and believed it, we would only wait for it to happen-when life is deprived of challenges and surprises, is it still worth living? To eliminate fortune tellers we have to persuade people not to go to them any longer. To begin with, we should explain why fortune telling is unreliable, and why finding a forture teller is a waste of time and energy. What's more important, we should help people understand that everyone is the architect of his own future-only through diligence and persistence can he realize his dreams. The meaning of life lies largely in the process of struggle and endurance. We have to improve our education to help young people fight for their ideals so as to forget fortune telling. 点评： 该文共分为四段来写作。第一段分为两句，第一句对图画进行描述--可以用直接引语，也可以用间接引语，其中直接引语更为常见。而后一句是承上启下的过渡句。 第二段首句表达了对该现象否定的态度，而后分为两个方面来说，各有一句话。第一句话是个并列句，后半部分使用了反问句。第二句话很复杂，前面是条件状语从句，使用了虚拟语气描述了与现实相反的情形，而后创造性地使用了破折号表示递进，而后是时间状语从句加上反问句，效果非常强烈--当人生失去了挑战和惊奇，它还值得活吗? 第三段提出了消除这一现象的办法，分为两个方面。 最后一段下结论，分两句话。第一句话说明了一条永恒的真理--生命的意义很大程度上在于奋斗和忍耐的过程，第二句话引到本文主题上--只有我们提高教育帮助年轻人为自己的理想而奋斗才能使他们忘记算命。 心得： 我们发现在范文中句子的复杂程度较高，包含了较多的并列句和复合句，即使是简单句，有的也很复杂。下面以第三段为例来说明。该段第二句是个并列句，句中有两个由疑问词why引导的宾语从句。第三句前半部分的宾语从句中是一句颇具哲理的谚语，后面使用了破折号，之后是个only引导的倒装句。
考前30天狂背作文 第三章 范文点评(42)的延伸阅读— —2014考研英语作文必背十大模板
考研英语作文，你是选择背模板还是提升英语写作自己写?两方面见解相持不下，不过对于英语复习时间不够充足和备考时间不够的同学，模板想必是少不了的。 1. 图画作文 It seems to me that the cartoonist is sending a message about _______(图画主题)， which is ______________(进一步的说明)。 He seems to be saying that_______________(给出细节)。 In my opinion， ___________(个人阐述)。 This simple picture is a wake up call for ______(所涉群体，如the whole of the human race)。 Therefore， it is imperative for us to take drastic measures to put an end to _____________(问题所在)。 One the one hand， we must _________________(建议一)。 It is clear that the drawer of the illustration is urging us to _________(进一步说明)。 On the other hand， ________________(建议二) Only in this way can we___________(展望前景)。 2. 图表作文 The chart gives us an overall picture of the ____________(图表主题)。 The first thing we notice is that_______________(图表最大特点)。 This means that as __________， _________________(进一步说明)。 We can see from the statistics given that _______________(图表细节一)。 After ving_________(细节一中的第一个变化)， the _____Ved+幅度+时间(紧跟着的变化)。 The figures also tells us that_________________________(图表细节二)。 (数据位置，如In the second column)， we can see that ____________accounts for _______(进一步描述)。Judging from these figures， we can draw the conclusion that___________(结论)。 The reason for this， as far as I am concerned is that_____________(给出原因)。 / It is high time that we Ved(发出倡议) 3. 利弊型作文 Recently the issue of whether or not______(讨论话题) has been in the limelight and has aroused wide concern in the public. There are two major arguments that can be made for_________. For one thing， __________can bring ____ to_____________(优点一)。 For another， it is widely hold that people usually ____when ________________________________(优点二)。 But we must not lose sight of the fact that there are also drawbacks to__________， among which are ____________(列举缺点)。 For instance， it can be __________to _____________(举例说明)。 In addition， many people find it ________(形容词)to _______________(第二个缺点) When asked to __________， I tend to ____________. This is because I _______________(原因一)。 Furthermore， _______________________(原因二)。 Finally， ______________(原因三)。 4. 展望未来型 The effects ___________ has produced on____________ can be boiled down to two major ones.First ， __________________(影响一)。 More importantly， ________________(影响二)。 Hence， I believe that we will see a ____________(提出展望)/ Nevertheless， I do not think we will see a ______(或反面展望) There are numerous reasons why ____， and I would like to explore a few of the most important ones here. The first is that the more(比较级)_____， the more (比较级)。 In addition， we all aGREe that________________________(第二个原因) 5. 告示 You should write about 100 words. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use Department of Chinese Language and Literature at the end of the announcement. Chinese-Speaking Contest January 19， 2008 To improve students„ ability to speak Chinese and enrich after-class activities， the Students‟ Union of Department of Chinese Language and Literature is organizing a school-wide Chinese-speaking contest to be held on Saturday next week (26 January) at the Students„ Auditorium. Those who are interested in taking part in it may sign up with the monitor of their classes before Tuesday next week. Five professors will be invited to be judges. The first six winners will be given awards. Everybody is welcome to be present at the contest. the Students„ Union Department of Chinese Language and Literature 6. 职业道德 the cartoons vividly depict people in expanding numbers are engaged in open and rampant cheating in business. In the first drawing， a boy has no courage to have dinner in front of delicious foods in that there may exist pesticide pollution or poisonous elements in the foods. In the second picture， the administrative office， salesmen， breeding families and forage shops are laughing at the hanging of a poisonous duck. Professional dishonesty has a very damaging effect. In the first place， since cheating in business reveals the moral deficiencies as well as the humanity weakness of those businessmen who engage in it， the dishonest practice will ultimately exerts a perverse influence on the whole society. In the second place， it not only puts honest businessmen at a competitive disadvantage， encouraging those who did not cheat to adopt similar practices later， but undermines the very foundation of professional ethics in business. It is often painful to impose sanctions in a specific case. But it is worthwhile. For one thing， to eliminate professional dishonesty thoroughly， serious forms of punishment for a willful offense—a suspension of the offender from business—should be applied. For another， since the incentives to engage in cheating in business are mainly due to a lack of adequate precautions， drastic actions should be taken to prevent one form of cheating or another. 7. 投诉信 Directions： You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because your roommate always has friends visiting and has parties in the room. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons. Dear Sir or Madam， I am writing to express/air dissatisfaction/disappointment/concern regarding accommodation. I would prefer to move into a single room next semester， as I find the present sharing arrangement inconvenient. I must explain that the reason for my dissatisfaction is my roommate„s inconsiderate behavior. For one thing， his friends are constantly visiting him; for another， he regularly holds noisy parties. To solve this problem/surmount this difficulty/improve this situation/crack this hard nut， I hope to draw the attention of the authorities concerned. I am sure you will aGREe that the only solution for me is to move into a room of my own. Therefore， I would be grateful if you could find a single room for me， preferably not in the same building but as near to the college campus as possible. Yours sincerely， Li Ming 8. 网络问题 In recent years， people are developing an inseparable relationship with Internet. As is vividly depicted in the picture， it is convenient for us to click the mouse when surfing on line， either to entertain ourselves or to meet the work„s needs. Actually on-line visiting has become a routine activity in our everyday life. However， it seems rath er ironic to use a chain instead of normal wire to connect with the mouse in this picture. The exaggerative and impressive portrayal has subtly revealed the duality of the relationship between man and Internet. Discussion on the duality has become very popular in newspapers or in people„s chats. On the one hand， no one denies that Internet is currently one of the most useful media in our daily life. People from all walks of life are benefiting considerably from its powerful function of information communication. But on the other hand， a GREat many people admit that they are too much addicted to Internet to maintain a regular and wholesome lifestyle. Cyber-living resembles the experience of looking constantly into a kaleidoscope which displays both colored patterns and illusions. Such a waste of time inevitably leads to their failure in their life and work. Accordingly， it is necessary for us to use Internet in a reasonable way and restrain from overindulgence. For one thing， college students in expanding numbers get on line every day to learn the news， to study English by registering for web courses， to exchange information through e-mails with their net friends and to download their favorite music， FLASH， film and pictures. Being veteran on-line shoppers， they frequently purchase books， CDs at much lower prices. For another， once indulged in the fictitious world， people can barely concentrate on real life. Consequently， many students just chat on line or play computer games immoderately everyday， skipping many essential classes. After all， Internet is invented to enrich our life， to connect you and me， and to improve the efficiency of our work rather than shackle us with a chain. 9. 环境问题 the pictures symbolically illustrate pollution is becoming increasingly serious around the globe. In the first cartoon， a man is scorching the earth on a chimney. In the second one， a famous ancient Chinese poet， Wang Bo is astonished by the heavy smoke poured by chimneys into the air and dirty river polluted by a factory. We are informed that “the autumn river is the same color with the sky”。 the drawer is sending a message about the significance of the need for everyone to fight against the danger of environmental pollution. There is no denying that the industry is indications of civilization， proGREss and development. Unfortunately， as industry develops， so will the number of factories， and the amount of industry pollutants. We are so development-oriented that we almost can sacrifice our blue sky and pure water in order to obtain a little material gain. As a consequence， it is imperative for us to take drastic actions. On the one hand， the factories should be equipped with devices which can dispose of waste gas and water so as to prevent them from polluting our planet. On the other hand， there should be an increasingly loud voice from the public for firm actions against poisonous gas sent off and unhealthy water polluted by factories. 10. 提纲式议论文 Directions： A. Title： Air Travel B. Time limit： 40 minutes C. Word limit： about 200 words D. Your essay should be written clearly on ANSWER SHEET 2. E. Your essay should be based on the information given below. 现在许多人愿意乘飞机旅行。随着我国民航事业的迅速发展，全国各大城市兴建了许多现代化的机场。乘飞机旅行有许多长处(方便、快捷、省时、舒适等);但是，空中旅行也有许多不足之处(机票价格贵，有的旅客不适应空中旅行，常常感到身体不适，甚至有人还担心发生空难)。请你简单阐述上述两个方面。最后请你说明你的看法。 ( Composition for reference only ) Many people prefer to travel by air. This is because air travel has some advantages. In the first place， airplane， the miracle created by man， is the fastest means of transport. It takes the least time for one to travel by air from one place to another. Secondly， traveling by air is convenient and comfortable. Friendly air hostesses are affectionate and considerate. They look after passengers all the way to their destinations. Moreover， on long distance flights there are films and music for people to entertain themselves. As a popular saying goes， “Everything has two sides .” The same is true of air travel. It has some disadvantages， too. For one thing， air travel costs a GREat deal. The average Chinese are not rich enough to afford expensive air fares. So they prefer to take trains， which save a lot of money. For another， although passengers are assured of their safety， they are still worried about it during the journey because flying always involves more or less risk. As far I am concerned ， the advantage mentioned above exceed the disadvantages. If I were given choice between traveling by train， I would certainly prefer the former. For me， time is money and it is the most important thing I have to take into consideration whatever I do. (216 words) |
