考前30天狂背作文 第三章 范文点评(36)
Directions 8 Study the following picture carefully and write an essay in which you should: 1. describe the picture, 2. interpret their meaning, and 3. make your comment. You should write 160~200 words neatly on ANSWER SHEET 2. 审题： 这篇文章的提纲与2002真题类似，属于最晦涩的一种，但是经过仔细分析后，我们将发现文章结构并不难把握，一种好的选择是--第一段描述图画，第二段对绘画者的意图进行推测，第三段对第二段做进一步说明，第四段下结论。 这里面至关重要的是第二段与第三段的关系。通常的情况是前一段就事论事或泛泛而论，后一段进行概括总结、提炼升华。 Sample: This picture sets me thinking for a long time. The parents themselves are playing mahjong, but they are telling their little child loudly: "Work hard. Don't let us down." The drawer reminds us of a common social phenomenon. Nowadays, more and more parents wish children to study hard in order to embrace a brilliant future, but many of them do not know how to turn this dream into reality. We come across many parents who ask their children to attend all kinds of training classes, but is it that important in the making of a good student and later a successful person? What is really important, according to the drawer, should be something else. That is the environment created by the parents and felt by the child. How can a child grow up into a scientist who loves research when the noise of playing mahjong is always there? Actions always speak louder than words. If parents turn off TV and family cinema, stop all noisy games and get down to reading quietly, the positive impact on the child will be considerable. In the years to come, the child will gradually learn concentration, which is an essential part of the learning process. Across the nation, parents are investing more and more money on the education of their child. If they have a closer look on the learning process, they will know what is important is often how they behave, not how much money they spend. 点评： 首段的描述非常简洁，与众不同的是第一句话--这两副画让我思忖良久。 第二段的首句是一个常用的模板句，非常有效。第二句话说许多家长望子成龙，却不知如何实现这个期望。而后举了一个例子，许多家长让孩子参加这样那样的培训班，但是这在孩子成材的过程中就那么重要吗? 第三段是文章的关键段落。该段首句是过渡句，引出了下面的关键句子--重要的是环境，是父母创造孩子感知的环境。而后使用反问句--当一直有麻将声时，一个孩子怎样能成长为热爱研究的科学家呢?而后使用谚语--行胜于言。如果父母关掉电视，开始读书，对孩子的正面影响将是巨大的。最后说在以后的数年中，孩子将会逐渐学会集中精力。 最后一段做结，分两句。第一句写父母大量投资在孩子的教育上面。第二句表示递进，如果父母仔细审视学习的过程，那么他们将知道，重要的是他们的行为，而不是投入的钱。 心得： 句子中的好的用法一定要日积月累，这很重要。第三段的首句中有插入语的用法。第二句有名词由两个平行的过去分词短语修饰的用法。第三句中的when the noise of playing mahjong is always there是个精彩用法，表示"一直有噪音"，如果说没有噪音，可以说when the noise is down。第四句是个谚语，需要平时积累，注意使用时务求准确。第五句在条件状语从句中，有平行的动宾结构。本段最后一句中in the years to come是个好词组，表示"在将要到来的数年中"，之后有非限制性定语从句的用法。
考前30天狂背作文 第三章 范文点评(36)的延伸阅读— —2014考研英语作文必背十大模板
考研英语作文，你是选择背模板还是提升英语写作自己写?两方面见解相持不下，不过对于英语复习时间不够充足和备考时间不够的同学，模板想必是少不了的。 1. 图画作文 It seems to me that the cartoonist is sending a message about _______(图画主题)， which is ______________(进一步的说明)。 He seems to be saying that_______________(给出细节)。 In my opinion， ___________(个人阐述)。 This simple picture is a wake up call for ______(所涉群体，如the whole of the human race)。 Therefore， it is imperative for us to take drastic measures to put an end to _____________(问题所在)。 One the one hand， we must _________________(建议一)。 It is clear that the drawer of the illustration is urging us to _________(进一步说明)。 On the other hand， ________________(建议二) Only in this way can we___________(展望前景)。 2. 图表作文 The chart gives us an overall picture of the ____________(图表主题)。 The first thing we notice is that_______________(图表最大特点)。 This means that as __________， _________________(进一步说明)。 We can see from the statistics given that _______________(图表细节一)。 After ving_________(细节一中的第一个变化)， the _____Ved+幅度+时间(紧跟着的变化)。 The figures also tells us that_________________________(图表细节二)。 (数据位置，如In the second column)， we can see that ____________accounts for _______(进一步描述)。Judging from these figures， we can draw the conclusion that___________(结论)。 The reason for this， as far as I am concerned is that_____________(给出原因)。 / It is high time that we Ved(发出倡议) 3. 利弊型作文 Recently the issue of whether or not______(讨论话题) has been in the limelight and has aroused wide concern in the public. There are two major arguments that can be made for_________. For one thing， __________can bring ____ to_____________(优点一)。 For another， it is widely hold that people usually ____when ________________________________(优点二)。 But we must not lose sight of the fact that there are also drawbacks to__________， among which are ____________(列举缺点)。 For instance， it can be __________to _____________(举例说明)。 In addition， many people find it ________(形容词)to _______________(第二个缺点) When asked to __________， I tend to ____________. This is because I _______________(原因一)。 Furthermore， _______________________(原因二)。 Finally， ______________(原因三)。 4. 展望未来型 The effects ___________ has produced on____________ can be boiled down to two major ones.First ， __________________(影响一)。 More importantly， ________________(影响二)。 Hence， I believe that we will see a ____________(提出展望)/ Nevertheless， I do not think we will see a ______(或反面展望) There are numerous reasons why ____， and I would like to explore a few of the most important ones here. The first is that the more(比较级)_____， the more (比较级)。 In addition， we all aGREe that________________________(第二个原因) 5. 告示 You should write about 100 words. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use Department of Chinese Language and Literature at the end of the announcement. Chinese-Speaking Contest January 19， 2008 To improve students„ ability to speak Chinese and enrich after-class activities， the Students‟ Union of Department of Chinese Language and Literature is organizing a school-wide Chinese-speaking contest to be held on Saturday next week (26 January) at the Students„ Auditorium. Those who are interested in taking part in it may sign up with the monitor of their classes before Tuesday next week. Five professors will be invited to be judges. The first six winners will be given awards. Everybody is welcome to be present at the contest. the Students„ Union Department of Chinese Language and Literature 6. 职业道德 the cartoons vividly depict people in expanding numbers are engaged in open and rampant cheating in business. In the first drawing， a boy has no courage to have dinner in front of delicious foods in that there may exist pesticide pollution or poisonous elements in the foods. In the second picture， the administrative office， salesmen， breeding families and forage shops are laughing at the hanging of a poisonous duck. Professional dishonesty has a very damaging effect. In the first place， since cheating in business reveals the moral deficiencies as well as the humanity weakness of those businessmen who engage in it， the dishonest practice will ultimately exerts a perverse influence on the whole society. In the second place， it not only puts honest businessmen at a competitive disadvantage， encouraging those who did not cheat to adopt similar practices later， but undermines the very foundation of professional ethics in business. It is often painful to impose sanctions in a specific case. But it is worthwhile. For one thing， to eliminate professional dishonesty thoroughly， serious forms of punishment for a willful offense—a suspension of the offender from business—should be applied. For another， since the incentives to engage in cheating in business are mainly due to a lack of adequate precautions， drastic actions should be taken to prevent one form of cheating or another. 7. 投诉信 Directions： You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it very difficult to work there because your roommate always has friends visiting and has parties in the room. Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons. Dear Sir or Madam， I am writing to express/air dissatisfaction/disappointment/concern regarding accommodation. I would prefer to move into a single room next semester， as I find the present sharing arrangement inconvenient. I must explain that the reason for my dissatisfaction is my roommate„s inconsiderate behavior. For one thing， his friends are constantly visiting him; for another， he regularly holds noisy parties. To solve this problem/surmount this difficulty/improve this situation/crack this hard nut， I hope to draw the attention of the authorities concerned. I am sure you will aGREe that the only solution for me is to move into a room of my own. Therefore， I would be grateful if you could find a single room for me， preferably not in the same building but as near to the college campus as possible. Yours sincerely， Li Ming 8. 网络问题 In recent years， people are developing an inseparable relationship with Internet. As is vividly depicted in the picture， it is convenient for us to click the mouse when surfing on line， either to entertain ourselves or to meet the work„s needs. Actually on-line visiting has become a routine activity in our everyday life. However， it seems rath er ironic to use a chain instead of normal wire to connect with the mouse in this picture. The exaggerative and impressive portrayal has subtly revealed the duality of the relationship between man and Internet. Discussion on the duality has become very popular in newspapers or in people„s chats. On the one hand， no one denies that Internet is currently one of the most useful media in our daily life. People from all walks of life are benefiting considerably from its powerful function of information communication. But on the other hand， a GREat many people admit that they are too much addicted to Internet to maintain a regular and wholesome lifestyle. Cyber-living resembles the experience of looking constantly into a kaleidoscope which displays both colored patterns and illusions. Such a waste of time inevitably leads to their failure in their life and work. Accordingly， it is necessary for us to use Internet in a reasonable way and restrain from overindulgence. For one thing， college students in expanding numbers get on line every day to learn the news， to study English by registering for web courses， to exchange information through e-mails with their net friends and to download their favorite music， FLASH， film and pictures. Being veteran on-line shoppers， they frequently purchase books， CDs at much lower prices. For another， once indulged in the fictitious world， people can barely concentrate on real life. Consequently， many students just chat on line or play computer games immoderately everyday， skipping many essential classes. After all， Internet is invented to enrich our life， to connect you and me， and to improve the efficiency of our work rather than shackle us with a chain. 9. 环境问题 the pictures symbolically illustrate pollution is becoming increasingly serious around the globe. In the first cartoon， a man is scorching the earth on a chimney. In the second one， a famous ancient Chinese poet， Wang Bo is astonished by the heavy smoke poured by chimneys into the air and dirty river polluted by a factory. We are informed that “the autumn river is the same color with the sky”。 the drawer is sending a message about the significance of the need for everyone to fight against the danger of environmental pollution. There is no denying that the industry is indications of civilization， proGREss and development. Unfortunately， as industry develops， so will the number of factories， and the amount of industry pollutants. We are so development-oriented that we almost can sacrifice our blue sky and pure water in order to obtain a little material gain. As a consequence， it is imperative for us to take drastic actions. On the one hand， the factories should be equipped with devices which can dispose of waste gas and water so as to prevent them from polluting our planet. On the other hand， there should be an increasingly loud voice from the public for firm actions against poisonous gas sent off and unhealthy water polluted by factories. 10. 提纲式议论文 Directions： A. Title： Air Travel B. Time limit： 40 minutes C. Word limit： about 200 words D. Your essay should be written clearly on ANSWER SHEET 2. E. Your essay should be based on the information given below. 现在许多人愿意乘飞机旅行。随着我国民航事业的迅速发展，全国各大城市兴建了许多现代化的机场。乘飞机旅行有许多长处(方便、快捷、省时、舒适等);但是，空中旅行也有许多不足之处(机票价格贵，有的旅客不适应空中旅行，常常感到身体不适，甚至有人还担心发生空难)。请你简单阐述上述两个方面。最后请你说明你的看法。 ( Composition for reference only ) Many people prefer to travel by air. This is because air travel has some advantages. In the first place， airplane， the miracle created by man， is the fastest means of transport. It takes the least time for one to travel by air from one place to another. Secondly， traveling by air is convenient and comfortable. Friendly air hostesses are affectionate and considerate. They look after passengers all the way to their destinations. Moreover， on long distance flights there are films and music for people to entertain themselves. As a popular saying goes， “Everything has two sides .” The same is true of air travel. It has some disadvantages， too. For one thing， air travel costs a GREat deal. The average Chinese are not rich enough to afford expensive air fares. So they prefer to take trains， which save a lot of money. For another， although passengers are assured of their safety， they are still worried about it during the journey because flying always involves more or less risk. As far I am concerned ， the advantage mentioned above exceed the disadvantages. If I were given choice between traveling by train， I would certainly prefer the former. For me， time is money and it is the most important thing I have to take into consideration whatever I do. (216 words) |
